camaz [finished]

[camaz]

NAME: camaz
AGE: 178 years
GENDER: female
STANDING: Wild
BREED: deadly nadder




LIKES:
~ Climbing
~ fighting
~ flying
~ Digging
~ noise
~ breatheing fire

DISLIKES:
~ Cold
~ quiet
~ Large groups of dragons or humans (unless they're fighting)
~ boredom
~ patience

STRENGTHS:
~ Climbing
~ fighting
~ Digging
~ breathing fire

WEAKNESSES:
~ patience
~ being careful
~ knowing when to stop something
~ finding somewhere to live
~ swimming

FEARS:
~ losing a fight
~ Large groups humans
~ Larger dragons
~ floods





PERSONALITY:aggresive. she likes to fight any other dragon
she comes across and thinks of herself as largely superior to smaller dragons. she has a fear of larger dragons and often runs at the sight of one


OVERALL PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION: she is a average sized deadly nadder with abnormally long caws and two razor fangs on either side of her face. she is a black nadder and has sharp spines going from her head down to her barbed tail. her wings are quite large.

ABILITIES: Fire-breathing
Climbing: .Flying. fighting



KEYWORD HIDDEN IN RULES:

OOC NAME TO CALL YOU BY: camaz
YEARS OF RP EXPERIENCE: 3-ish
RP EXAMPLE OF THE CHARACTER YOU'RE APPLYING FOR:

camaz leapt down onto the opposing deady nadder, a white male no larger than herself, and slashed her tail along his side, he copied her and she opened her mouth and let out an inferno onto him. he half dodged, but it burnt his left flank. the male was furious and leapt onto camaz. withing a few minutes, both dragons were burnt and the male was beeding heavily from a neck wound. camaz took advantage of his weakness and le out a final blast of flame to kill him. she tried flying back to her cave, but the male had burnt her wings. in the end she had to run home, bleeding heavily from a wound in her flank

[REDKITEBAIT]

Is this finished? Please put in the title the status of the application, so I know when I can review this.

Thank you :3

[REDKITEBAIT]

Now that's done, Welcome to BerksDragons! Let's see what needs to be done, shall we?

First thing, you've forgotten to add the history when you were copying and pasting the application code. Could you do that please?

The personality needs to be beefed up a bit more. Surely there's more to her than being generally agressive?

Could you describe Camaz's abilities? You speak about her extra large teeth - maybe she has a powerful bite? Does she have anything that sets her apart from other Nadders?

Read the rules to find out what the keyword is. We will know if you haven't read them

Also, your RP example is a little short. The minimum number of words is 200, maybe add another paragraph?

Thank you, I will review this again when the above mentioned is done. ^_^