Short Writing of Mine

[Sven & Hermes]

Oh my god. That was a brilliant read. I love how you showed the agony the character or being was going through, use of commas and paragraphs bringing the text to it's full potential. I thought you used the adjectives and imagery really well, as well as the metaphors.

My english sucks since I've lived in france for a while, but it brings me pleasure to read something awesome like this ^_^

I dunno, I can't really see anything to critique it in my eyes...
Keep up the awesome work!!

[winter]

That made me speechless. Such a short yet wonderful story, which reminds me of The Tell-Tale Heart by Edgar Allan Poe. Intense and pulling you in, the imagination ran and finally solified at the end.

And besides one or two miss-spelling, it was absolutely wonderful and I would probably read it a million times over.

[winter]

That was still pretty good.