Stargaze Riddle(finished)

[Stargaze Riddle]

Stargaze Nile Riddle
It starts with pain. Followed by hate. Fueled by the endless questions no one can answer. A stain covers your heart and it tears you apart like a sleeping cancer.

Stargaze Nile Riddle

Stargaze Nile Riddle. She prefers to go by Star often. But her nickname is The Riddle Girl.


ORIGINS

She was born on March 25. Her place of birth was Berk and she is currently 16 years old. All of her family is dead. They were murdered by dragons when she was a young girl. At the age of seven. She had to learn to how raise herself for the matter of no one would take her. No one actually knew about her. They thought the Riddle's had no children. When she became noticed, she grew social. Still a little Anti-social but more so. She is also rumored to be the descendant of Hiccup Haddock.



GENDER & SEXUALITY

Female.
Pansexual


OCCUPATION

She often steals from people. At random. But now it's tricky with all the dragons around. So now she just does what she can to survive. She is very low ranked. Although rather sneaky.


TRAITS:
Self-centered, rude, cowardly, loner, not easy to work with, flirty(rarely), villanish, demented, caring, loving, then a totally oppisate side.

STRENGTHS:

▪ Knowlage of forest
▪ Hatred of dragons
▪ Darkness(the night)
▪ Can know a persons feelings

WEAKNESSES:

▪ Half blind
▪ Water(not the best swimmer)
▪ Sight of a dragon
▪ highs

LIKES:

▪ Meat
▪ Nature
▪ Moonlight
▪ Helping animals
▪ Winter

DISLIKES:

▪ New moon (beginning of the moon cycle. Clearly)
▪ Dragons
▪ Summer
▪ Veggies

FEARS:

▪ being forever alone
▪ spiders
▪ Night Furies
▪ Being caught in a fire and can't get out

AMBITIONS:

▪ More family oriented
▪ friends
▪ someone or something to protect her
▪ Her own dragon but doesn't think it'd be possible from her hatred to them.

SECRETS:

▪ She is half blind but looks like she can see out of both
▪ Wont admit to herself she could be a better person

OVERALL PERSONALITY

Rude, hot headed, does have softer side


PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION

Long brown hair, rather messy, blue eyes, pale skin, 5"2, round waist, very thin, almost high voice, wears fur pelts and leather boots

FIGHT TO THE DEATH



WEAPON(S) OF CHOICE:

▪ sword
▪ battle axe


DRAGON NAME: (Doesn't have one currently)

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Stargaze

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[REDKITEBAIT]

Looks interesting, but i can't review it yet, because you haven't read the rules to find the password and you're missing a strength from the minimum of 4

ooc name is what we call you by in the cbox, not your real name >.>

[Stargaze Riddle]

Well when I see OOC to me that means Out of Character. Like IC means Jn Character and OC means Original Character. But alright when I change to my computer ill fix it :3

[REDKITEBAIT]

Yah, that's what we mean too, out-of-character, but that doesn't mean real-life identities or anything silly like that *flaps hands*. XD Redkitebait would be a pretty weird-ass name irl XD

[Stargaze Riddle]

I edited it like you asked :3

[REDKITEBAIT]

Still missing the keyword/password, before i can review. You can find it through reading the rules

[Stargaze Riddle]

Hysera (never found the forth letter)

[REDKITEBAIT]

Okies, I'll let it pass, as long as you've read and understood the rules ^_^ With that, let's get reviewing!

First of all, the name of your character should be more Viking-y to fit in the world. As I understand this character originates from a Harry Potter OC, right? Tom Riddle doesn't exist in this world ^_^

The history needs to be a little more fleshed out. As in the Originality thread, we only allow overused stuff if they've got good reasoning with them, not just because 'it's cool' or idk what. Why would dragons attack the whole family, and kill them all? Was it provoked/unprovoked? How did your character survive? I don't think it's possible for the child to be able to raise herself without having some sort of consequence - like social skills, how to talk to people properly, social etiquette and all that jazz. Most of all - getting food for herself without dying of hunger before aquiring the necessary skills to hunt/fish/gather/cook. Surely someone could have taken her in? Vikings do have a moral code lol, they're not going to leave an orphan kid by themselves. Perhaps you could also explain in the history how she became half-blind, gather knowledge of the forest and understand how people feel despite being horribly anti-social from her time of solitude growing up alone?

If you have read and understood the rules, we don't allow 'descendants of Hiccup' or other canon character there may be.

Has she taken part in dragon training? I don't think the Village will allow a thief to live in the village, so unless she wants to get caught she needs to have some other use in the village, so that she's not some sort of free-loader. There aren't really 'ranks' on Berk, unless she's a warrior. I need to know what she does so I can set her a group to be a part of.

A hatred of dragons probably goes more in the Dislikes section. Darkness isn't a strength, darkness can't be attributed to a person. Unless you can explain what she can do in the darkness that gives her an advantage? Especially as she is half-blind, so she probably would have difficulty seeing things anyway. How can seeing a dragon be a weak point in her skills? Can you explain how heights are a weakness to her? Is she afraid of heights? Does she have vertigo? Or does she just have difficulty climbing up stuff or something? Why would she dislike a new moon cycle? What's not to like/dislike about that?

The traits thing is just a title, that list o' stuff should probably go in personality. That said, I don't see how someone can be caring, but then be self-centered and rude. It's slightly contradicting. Same with villainish and loving. What is 'a totally opposite side'?

She is very thin, does this also mean she does not have muscles? She will need them if she wants to be able to swing a sword or an axe. Stickfigure-like characters won't be able to wield heavy weapons unless they're beefed up.

That's about it for now, once these things are seen to I'll come by an review it again! ^_^ Sorry it's taken so long for me to properly reviewing this >_<

[Stargaze Riddle]

For the record, my characters are never completed. Always under devolpment. Even my oldest character, Wings, has not been fully devoloped. And she's a wolf for crying out loud.

[Stargaze Riddle]

And I'll explain them.
I only chose Stargaze because I know Star would've been pretty boring. I chose Riddle because I'm actually related to Riddel's.
Q:Why would dragons attack the whole family, and kill them all?
A: I honestly am still thinking that through, I'm leaning on that her parents stole a dragon egg from them, then also leaning on that the dragons wanted revenge on her father for murdering a important member of their flock.

Q: Was it provoked/unprovoked?
A: Either way I go, it'll be provoked.

Q: How did your character survive?
A: She has a pet fox who somewhat raised her, the fox's name is Berk. She knew enough that this island is known as Berk.

Q: Has she taken part in dragon training?
A: No she has not.
(I'll get back to this later)