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Post by robinwing on Aug 4, 2010 11:13:42 GMT -5
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Post by aya on Aug 4, 2010 14:42:04 GMT -5
I gave your biography a second read through, and from what I've read it looks good. One part I'd like to mention is the "Likes-Secrets" area. Those I liked reading over because they were humourously, though appropriately, worded and easily gave me the point while making me chuckle.
Though in the same area, or more accurate, the "Likes" and "Dislikes" part--anything else? I realize it reached the requirements--and I know my own bio doesn't have much on dislikes(that was my own fault)--but I just felt I should point it out. I saw you further described it, which I empathize makes adding more more difficult. Ya know, more in-depth and unique facts. But just figured it ought to make a great biography even better.
Just a quick thought, but the history seems a bit... short. But it's probably because of other sites I'm on... x.x
But all in all, love the bio and the character deems interesting to me. So have fun! ^w^
Which word processor do you use? Mine is Word 2007 and it says "paralyzed" is right, lol.
Did your summer just start or something? 'Cause mine is just a few days from over... T~T
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Post by robinwing on Aug 4, 2010 16:20:55 GMT -5
I'm british, appropriate, dry humour is something I think is gentically coded in. I'm always being told I have a dry sense of humour, so I guess it's even stronger in me.
Well, I think I may have an idea, but it's after extensive thought into Alfrun's charater. And it's just one extra. XD
Dangit, I tried to make it long enough by describing the rock in detail. I guess it's because the rock incident overshadowed alot of the rest of her past. I think I can describe more, if I try.
Really, your summer's nearly over? Wow, the six hours I'm ahead of americans must really add up...
EDIT: Added a like, and a paragraph to the history.
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Post by aya on Aug 4, 2010 17:47:10 GMT -5
Woo~ for British peeps! xDD Anyway, most of my biographies are like that, but mainly for my characters that have anger issues. I don't know why, but it just seems, to me, to better explain them... Like I'll add "dun dun DUN" randomly, too. XD
Okay, back on task, lol. I read the bio again, and I like it still. Oh, and I noticed this time around that the height is [5"7]. [5'7"], right? Typos, gotta love 'em! (not) I'm also curious as to her weight--and I know its not right for a woman to give her weight, lol--but you said she was slim, but her height poses as a factor. Also assuming her bones and structure--big-boned? Light, feminine frame? And maybe her false hand? It's Viking era, so it's possible that it isn't the lightest of them all--aside it being made from wood, which is pretty easy to lift in general--if it's hollow. But the string mechanism?
Ah well, I only mentioned the Likes and Dislikes because of my habits of out-doing my friends--and them vise versa--on other RP sites we have, lol. xD It's a bad habit; so I just said something about it 'cause targeting those areas is usually where it gets the nitty-gritty. Speaking of which, we're re-doing our bios since I revamped the sites, and you can only tell what kind of crap is happening. xDD
Also, it seems like some of your character's likes can also double as strengths, too. Though, from my view, you did that already by rewording and combining them. Kudos~!
Well... aren't British schools different from American ones anyway? I never really looked into it, since I kindasorta thought--had as a mindset, really--they weren't the same... >.> Though the daggom Harry Potter books friggin' through me off on that... Dx |
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